This was a very sound submission, but there were a lot of comments made that I would have liked to have seen supporting research or citations.  Many times that content was used as a lead in to an area where a reference would support the train of thought, but the comments alone were substantial enough that they should have been supported by additional research. For example,. the last paragraph, first sentence, on page 6. This is an example of making an assumption, unfounded though potentially correct, but not substantiating the content.